* Air pollution *
Air pollution became a very dangerous phenomenon nowadays. A group of reasons are behind this phenomenon . among these reasons are cars,factors-especially chemical ones ,rubbish burning and even smoking . air pollution has affected us in a way that could be noticed in our daily life .
When there is a traffic jam, the amount of smoke getting out of cars is really noticable. However, cars are not the only sourece of smoke . one can not imagine this thick cloud of smoke getting out of factors,especioally the chemical ones. At some areas the way of getting over rubbish is by burning massive amount of it. Rural life also has a role to play with air pollution. In many rural areas people get over insects theat would be harmful to their yield by there use of insecticide which has a negative effect over our environment. Even this tiny smoke getting out from a cigarette would affect our environment badly.
High temperature is one of the direct effects of air pollution. What is more , this made accidents are more likely to occur . people's motivation to work has been decreased as aresult of high temperature . in addition , new diseases lead to an urgent need for new researches and experimrnts.
According to the above mentioned , government should put a new set of traffic rules . among these traffic rules should be the prohibition of petrol cars. Cars should work eithe rby gas or electricity . also ,government should look for a new way of getting over smoke getting out of factories . recycling rubbish would be among the possiblrsolutions of such a problem . media should play an effective role to make people more consious about the consquences of such a problem.
Air pollution will not affect us but also the coming generations . as a result , getting a clear environment will not be the work of a certain institution but the work of all parts of society. The first step in dealing with air pollution will be by dealing with the reasons behind it.
your style is interesting . you have various ideas and valuable solutions: butu have a problem in tenses
ردحذفthe sentences in this essay clear and direct, and the words are very simle , but you concentate only on smoke as the main cause of air pollution.
ردحذفYour words are very clear and spelled correctly .The essay maintains a consistent tone.Good work.
ردحذفhi ayoy/ _ur essay have main idea and is organized. _ur semtences are clear and direct. _ur essay maintains a consirtent tone. _u did not write in ur introduction about effects or reasons. _there is no topic sentences in the paragraphs of causes and effects .
ردحذف* you have main idea .
ردحذف* your essay is organised .
* your sentences are clear and direct.
* your essay maintsin a consistent tone .
* you did not write in ur introduction about ur effects and sollutions for the problem . you wrote only about reasons .
* there is no topic sentence in the second paragraph , speaking about causes and effects .
Air pollution (has become) became a very dangerous phenomenon nowadays. A group of reasons (is) are behind this phenomenon . among these reasons are cars,factors-especially chemical ones ,rubbish burning and even smoking . air pollution has affected us in a way that could be noticed in our daily life .
ردحذفWhen there is a traffic jam, the amount of smoke getting out of cars is really noticeable(wrong spelling). However, cars are not the only sourece (wrong spelling) of smoke . one can not imagine this thick cloud of smoke getting out of factors,especioally (wrong spelling) the chemical ones. At some areas the way of getting over rubbish is by burning massive amount of it. Rural life also has a role to play with air pollution. In many rural areas people get over (wrong verb) insects theat (wrong word) would be harmful to their yield(wrong spelling) by there use of insecticide which has a negative effect over our environment. Even this tiny smoke getting out from a cigarette would affect our environment badly.
High temperature is one of the direct effects of air pollution. What is more , this made accidents are more likely to occur . people's motivation to work has been decreased as aresult (a result) of high temperature . in addition (additionally), new diseases lead to an urgent need for new researches and experimrnts(wrong spelling).
According to the above mentioned (complete the meaning), government should put a new set of traffic rules . among these traffic rules should be the prohibition of petrol cars. Cars should work eithe rby (either by ) gas or electricity . also (capitalize) ,government should look for a new way of getting over smoke getting out of factories . recycling (capitalize) , rubbish would be among the possiblrsolutions (correct the words) of such a problem . media (capitalize) should play an effective role to make people more consious (wrong spelling).
about the consquences (wrong spelling)of such a problem (don’t put a sentence alone, add it to the next paragraph).
Air pollution will not affect us but also the coming generations . as (capitalize) a result , getting a clear environment will not be the work of a certain institution but the work of all parts of society. The first step in dealing with air pollution will be by dealing with the reasons behind it.
I liked the picture you used very much. It is a very related one.
ردحذفGood choice